Saturday, April 24, 2010

Dose anyone know how to turn this into an essay?

Hello, My name is Terri Booker and I am writing you this letter Mr. /Miss ___


Because I have to believe that, your product is dangerous to the people buying it. I have done some rescue on some of the chemicals that you put into your product and I am going to tell you a bit about it.





The first chemical is Stearic acid, which is a colorless, wax like, sparingly water-soluble, odorless solid, C18H36O2, the most common fatty acid, occurring as the glycoside in tallow and other animal fats and in some animal oils: used chiefly in the manufacture of soaps, separates, candles, cosmetics, and in medicine in suppositories and pill coatings. The second chemical is lactic acid, which is a syrupy, water-soluble liquid, C3H6O3, produced in muscles as a result of anaerobic glucose metabolism, and present in sour milk, molasses, various fruits, and wines. A synthetic form of the compound is used in foods and beverages as a flavoring and preservative, in dyeing and textile printing, and in pharmaceuticals.


The next chemical is methylparaben, which is a crystalline compound C8H8O3 used as an antifungal preservative (as in pharmaceutical ointments and cosmetic creams and lotions). The last chemical I’m going to address you is keratin this is one of the chemicals I’m most concerned about because keratin is a scleroprotein or albuminoidal substance, found in the dead outer skin layer, and in horn, hair, feathers, hoofs, nails, claws, bills, etc.





Thanks, you for your time reading this very important letter, I hope you see how I am concerned about you and the people buying it because as another result all the chemicals I just addressed you are very harmful for the human kind.





Thank you





Terri Booker

Dose anyone know how to turn this into an essay?
Well, first you need to do a little more "rescue" (although I think you meant research).





You have listed four compounds and some facts about them, but you have given no indication that they are dangerous or harmful. In fact, you point out that three of the four compounds are found naturally in the human body. Why do you believe they are harmful?





As far as turning it into an essay, start with an introduction to a general audience. "Introduce" them to your topic, and why you are telling them about it.





Next, go through your topic. Give information about the product, the compounds, how you know the compounds are in the product, why they are harmful, how you know they are harmful, and what you think should be done about it.





Finally, summarize. Are you asking the reader to do something? What should they do?


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